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Why I Want to Be
a Doctor?
Many people look back in time
to find the moment of their initial inspiration.
Some people have wanted to be a doctor so
long they do not even know what originally
inspired them. To incorporate this theme,
look back to the material you gathered in
the last chapter, specifically in response
to “The Chronological Method,” “Note Major
Influences,” and “Identify Your Goals.” Ask
yourself these questions: How old was I when
I first wanted to become a doctor? Was there
a defining moment? Was there ever any ambivalence?
Was I inspired by a specific person? What
kind of doctor do I want to be and how does
that tie into my motivation?
Here are a few of the common
ways that students incorporate this theme:
“I’ve Always Wanted to Be a
Doctor”
AKA: “I’ve Wanted to Be a Doctor
Since I Was…” and “Everyone Has Always Said
I’d Be a Doctor”
This is perhaps the most common
approach of all. The secret to doing it well
is to show, not just tell, why you want to
be a doctor. You cannot just say it and expect
it to stand on its own. Take the advice of
one admissions officer:
“The “I’ve always wanted to
be a doctor” essay has been done to death.
I think candidates need to be careful to
show that their decision was not only a pre-adolescent
one and has been tested over the years and
approached in a mature manner.”
Supply believable details from
your life to make your desire real to the
reader. One secret to avoiding the “here
we go again” reaction is to be particularly
careful with your first line. Starting with
“I’ve wanted to be a doctor since…” makes
the reader cringe. It’s an easy line to fall
back on, but admissions officers have read
this sentence more times than they care to
count; don’t add to the statistic.
“My Parents are Doctors”
This approach to the “why I
want to be a doctor” theme is dangerous for
a different reason. Says one officer:
“It’s a prejudice of mine, but
the legacy essay, the one that reads, “My
dad and my grandpa and my great-grandpa were
all doctors so I should be too,” makes me
suspect immaturity. I envision young people
who can’t think for themselves or make up
their own minds.”
This is not the opinion of every
officer, though. The point is not to avoid
admitting that your parent is an M.D., it
is to avoid depending on that as the sole
reason for you wanting to go to medical school.
If a parent truly was your inspiration, then
describe exactly why you were inspired.
“My Doctor Changed My Life!”
AKA: “Being a Patient Made Me
Want to Become a Doctor”
Some people claim to be motivated
to become doctors because they have had personal
experience of illness or disability. Notes
an admissions officer:
“I had a student who grew up
with a chronic illness. She spent much time
with physicians and other health care providers
throughout her young life. In her essay she
wrote about this continuing experience and
how the medical professionals treated her.
She wrote of her admiration of them as well
as her understanding that they couldn’t yet
cure her. Her essay literally jumped off
the page as being unique to her and a compelling
understanding of and testament to her desire
to join the people who had been so important
to her life.”
If your personal experience
with the medical profession sincerely is
your motivation for attending medical school,
then do write about it. The problem is that
many students fall back on this topic even
when it does not particularly hold true for
them. We cannot stress enough that you do
not have to have a life-defining ability
or a dramatic experience to have an exciting
statement. Admissions committees receive
piles of accident- and illness-related essays
and the ones that seem insincere stick out
like sore thumbs (pun intended!) and do not
reflect well on you as a candidate. Says
another officer:
“My orthodontist changed my
life!” “My dentist gave me my smile back!”
These types of themes are certainly valid,
but go beyond that to what particular aspect
of the profession intrigues you. Do you understand
how many years of study your orthodontist
had to have in order to reach his level of
practice? Have you observed your dentist
for any significant amount of time? Do you
know that the profession now is much different
than it was when he or she was starting out?
Have you given any thought to the danger
of infectious diseases to all health-care
professionals? Present a well-organized,
complete essay dealing with these points.”
You may just want to mention
your own experience only briefly toward the
end of the essay. Use it as a confirmation
of your decision to be a doctor (instead
of as his primary motivation) and demonstrate
that because of the experience you will become
a better doctor. Try not to dwell on the
experience and provide plenty of further
evidence of your sincere motivation.
“My Mom Had Cancer”
This theme is really just a
variation of “I was a patient myself” and
the same advice applies: If a loved one’s
battle with illness, trauma, or disability
is truly what inspired your wish to become
a doctor, then by all means mention it. But
don’t dwell on it, don’t overdramatize, and
don’t let it stand as your sole motivation-show
that you’ve done your research and you understand
the life of a doctor and you chose it for
a variety of reasons.
The Hard-Luck Tale
Some truly outstanding essays
are about strong emotional experiences such
as a childhood struggle with disease or the
death of a loved one. Some of these are done
so effectively that they are held up as role
models for all essays. Says one officer:
“I had a student who was considered
a weak candidate because of poor grades and
low test scores. She was African-American
and although she had pursued all the right
avenues (classes, MCAT, volunteer experiences)
to prepare herself for medical school, she
remained undistinguished as a candidate-
until, that is, she wrote her essay. The
essay revealed her tremendous and sincere
drive. She was from a crime-riddled area
of New York City and several of her siblings
had been violently killed. She wrote about
her experience and her desire to practice
medicine in the city and improve the neighborhood
where she was raised. It was compelling,
believable, and truly inspiring.”
While it is true that these
poignant tales can provide very strong evidence
of motivation for medical school, they are
difficult to do well and need to be handled
with extreme care and sensitivity. And, as
we have said before, do not rely on the tale
itself to carry you through; you always need
to clearly show your motivation. Notes another
admissions officer:
“This is going to sound harsh,
but I don’t like the tales of woe such as
the ones that begin with the mother’s death
from cancer. Frankly, I feel manipulated
and I don’t think that the personal statement
is the proper mode of expression for that
kind of emotion.”
The Medical Dichotomy
One of the major draws of the
medical field is its dualistic nature combining
hard-core science with the softer side of
helping people. This is described by people
in many ways; some describe it as a dichotomy
of science to art; to others it is intellectualism
to humanism, theory to application, research
to creativity, or qualitative to social skills.
No matter how you choose to phrase it, if
you mention the dichotomy, then be sure to
touch on your qualifications and experience
in both areas.
From
ESSAYS THAT WILL GET YOU INTO COLLEGE,
by Amy Burnham, Daniel Kaufman, and Chris
Dowhan.
Copyright 1998 by Dan Kaufman. Reprinted by arrangement with Barron's
Educational Series, Inc.
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