EXERCISE
#7: TRANSITIONS
Connect the following
sentences using an effective transition,
when needed. (In some cases, the two
sentences will be able to stand without
a transition.)
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Ordinarily,
I took my responsibility seriously
and would write down classmates'
names to preserve the silence and
decorum of the school environment. |
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When a different
teacher walked in, a teacher
known to punish
too hard and painfully, I decided to save my friends from his hard strokes,
and I erased all the names.
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| 2. |
Despite the windy conditions
and below freezing temperatures,
I could not tear myself away
from the awe-inspiring beauty
of the cosmos.
Despite the frustration and
difficulties inherent in scientific
study, I cannot retreat from
my goal of universal understanding.
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| 3. |
But the sadness with which she
responded, stating, "He
died when he was a baby,” convinced
me that it was true.
It affected me as nothing ever
would again.
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| 4. |
Finishing the test in an unspectacular
six minutes and five seconds,
I stumbled off the erg more exhausted
than I had ever been. That night,
I went home and caught a cold.
Had I followed my survivalist
and rationalist instincts, I
would have quit rowing then and
there;
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| 5. |
Immediately, I realized that
I must dedicate my life to understanding
the causes of the universe's
beauty.
The hike taught me several valuable
lessons that will allow me to
increase my understanding through
scientific research.
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| 6. |
After my grandfather’s death,
I began to understand and follow
his sage advice.
I pulled out a picture of my
grandfather and me at Disneyland.
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| 7. |
Often, she had to work from
dusk to dawn living a double
life as a student and a financially
responsible adult.
My mother managed to keep a
positive disposition.
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| 8. |
In addition to
working and studying, she found
time to make weekly visits to
terminally ill and abandoned
children in the local hospital.My
mother developed the value of
selflessness.
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| 9. |
My mother made me learn Indonesian,
the official language of our
country.
Also, she wanted me to develop
interests in various academic
and extracurricular fields.
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1) However; 2) Similarly;
3) The shock of this revelation at
such a tender age; 4) That was three
seasons ago. 5) In addition; 6) To
cope with his passing; 7) Despite the
burdens she faced; 8) From her experiences
during college; 9) My mother did not
only want me to have a broad knowledge
of languages.
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From
ESSAYS THAT WILL GET YOU INTO COLLEGE,
by Amy Burnham, Daniel Kaufman, and
Chris Dowhan.
Copyright 1998 by Dan Kaufman. Reprinted
by arrangement with Barron's Educational
Series, Inc.
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