Describe the individuals
that you look up to as role models in
your professional work. (Michigan)
Describe the characteristics
of an exceptional manager by examining
someone whom you have observed or with
whom you have worked. Illustrate how
his or her management style has influenced
you. (Tuck)
If you could walk in someone
else’s shoes for a day, whose would
you choose and why? (Chicago)
Business schools learn
a lot about your professional development
through your description of your mentors.
They can determine not only what you
have learned but the types of people
from whom you have learned. However,
like the accomplishments question, this
question shows a lot about your values
and standards. It is a little like getting
to know a person by the people with
whom he or she chooses to spend time.
If you are skeptical, consider the different
impression you would have of the candidate
who admires a dynamic, colorful, public
leader compared with someone who looks
up to an accomplished but soft-spoken
academic.
Who you chose is more important
than how you portray that person. In
other words, do not choose a person
because you think it will impress the
committee. Name dropping is not only
obvious, it is ineffective. If your
mentor is a public figure, be sure to
demonstrate that you have a real, direct
relationship with and that you learned
tangible lessons from the person. Keep
your essay short and simple. Never elevate
your mentor at the expense of yourself.
Show admiration, not awe. In other words,
choose a mentor, not a hero. A mentor
is someone whom you realistically aspire
to emulate, whereas a hero’s qualities
are beyond our reach.
If the question calls for
more than one mentor, try comparing
two very different people or people
from two unrelated areas of your life.
Show how you incorporated the best pieces
of wisdom from both. As always, use
concrete examples both when describing
these people and when demonstrating
the effect they have had on you. Do
more than list their qualities-tell
a story that shows how they have put
these qualities to use.
You can follow these steps
to structure this essay:
1. Introduce the person
and the context in which you know him
or her.
2. Describe a few of the
mentor’s key qualities that you most
admire.
3. Relate one or two particular
scenarios that demonstrate these qualities.
4. Describe what you have
learned from the person. What do you
now do differently as a result of having
known your mentor? How have you or your
actions changed?
5. Be concrete. Cite specific
examples of things that you have learned.
Describe the situations in which you
learned these things. Show how you have
used this knowledge to your professional
advantage.
A variation on the question
is, “If you could walk in someone else’s
shoes for a day . . . .” This is a cross
between an ideal career question and
a role model question. Whereas the other
role model questions ask for mentors,
this question asks for heroes. You do
not need to make your response as realistic-feel
free to loosen up and have fun. However,
always consider what committee members
will infer from your choice. Answer
this question more concisely than you
would the role model one. Simply state
who you would choose and answer why.
Did you choose this person because he
or she is similar or dissimilar to you?
Did you do choose your mentor for what
you can learn from that person or to
effect a change? Would you ever seriously
consider this person’s life as a career,
or are you just having fun?
SAMPLE ESSAY:
Describe the characteristics
of an exceptional manager by examining
someone whom you have observed or with
whom you have worked. Illustrate how
his or her management style has influenced
you. (Tuck)
In management consulting,
strong analytical skills are valued
as much as, if not more than, effective
managerial and leadership skills. Unfortunately,
for some consultants, these characteristics,
at times, are mutually exclusive. I
was fortunate, however, to work with
[name] on my first major project at
[consulting firm]. As my project manager,
he demonstrated a superior combination
of leadership, managerial, and communication
skills. As a result of our interaction,
I learned several important lessons
and tools that I used on subsequent
projects to improve my effectiveness
as a team leader.
To begin, [name] is a true
leader who exhibits courage and dedication.
A powerful trait rarely found in the
realm of business, courage is unique
in its ability to unify and motivate
people. Moreover, his courage is balanced
appropriately with professionalism,
strong values, and humility. He is sensitive
to others’ feelings and recognizes that
different people require different types
of direction and treatment. Although
he often works with diverse and difficult
groups, he always seems able to reach
consensus and create a shared vision
and purpose. Furthermore, he excels
at establishing priorities and proactively
setting direction.
As an effective manager,
[name] also is able to translate his
broad direction into discrete, tangible
tasks. Since consultants often use difficult
or creative analytical approaches, clearly
articulating tasks and defining outputs
is very important. In addition, he exercises
the appropriate level of supervision.
Rather than micro-managing his team
members, [name] establishes clear accountabilities
and expectations and pushes work down
to the correct level. As a result, he
creates a strong sense of ownership
and leverages the skills of his team
members. Furthermore, he excels at creating
a supportive environment and, when necessary,
coaching team members to help them develop
new skills.
Finally, [name] is a masterful
communicator. He is the only project
manager I have had who gave me consistent
and constructive feedback, importantly,
both positive and negative. Such feedback
not only provides clear developmental
objectives, but also signals to others
that he values their contributions.
This type of balanced and open communication
quickly forms the foundation of mutual
trust and respect. Furthermore, [name]
excels in the art of negotiation and
debate. He states his points with remarkable
precision and is expert at remaining
objective and recognizing all sides
of an argument. And, regardless of the
volatility of a situation or the strength
of his feelings, he always listens to
all positions patiently and effectively
controls his demonstration of emotion,
thereby gaining the respect of others
and lending additional credibility to
his positions.
Given my limited experience
managing teams, my exposure to [name]
was central to my early success at [consulting
firm]. For example, although I had considered
myself a leader in athletics, I had
not learned to translate those skills
into the business arena. [Name] taught
me several effective methods to lead
teams. Admittedly, as a highly motivated
young analyst with very high work standards,
I also lacked many of the skills required
for effective team leadership. However,
I quickly learned the importance of
flexibility and became more comfortable
providing feedback and directing the
work of others. Furthermore, through
his example, [name] taught me the importance
of objectivity and the utility of several
effective communication techniques.
For example, I learned to use my sense
of humor as an effective tool to persuade,
disarm, or motivate others.
Early in my career at [consulting
firm], I had several rare opportunities
to lead client teams. In part due to
the lessons I learned from [name], these
projects were a great success. As a
result, I went on to manage a half dozen
diverse and difficult client teams that
ranged in membership. With each project,
I further refined the lessons I learned
from [name] and developed new techniques
for leading and managing teams. Due
to my rapid development, I was promoted
to [position], a managerial, post-M.B.A.
position at [consulting firm], signifying
that I can progress to the partner level.
Although I realize my tool kit is far
from complete, these skills will be
invaluable both in business school and
beyond.
COMMENTS:
This is another essay that
stands out because of its solid writing
and superior organization. It starts
with a bold assertion to catch the reader’s
attention and then uses the assertion
to introduce the mentor’s most outstanding
quality. Each of the next three paragraphs
clearly asserts and describes an additional
supporting quality. The essay concludes
with examples of how the mentor’s influence
has tangibly affected the writer’s actions
and work performance, resulting in rapid
promotion.
From
ESSAYS THAT WILL GET YOU INTO COLLEGE,
by Amy Burnham, Daniel Kaufman, and Chris
Dowhan.
Copyright 1998 by Dan Kaufman. Reprinted
by angement with Barron's Educational
Series, Inc.